So, I'm editing Dead Inside

I've talked about this before, but, I was in the mood to give it its own post, so, here I am!

While I could sit here and babble about backstory, really it's just: I've kind of wanted to rewrite Dead Inside for the past year or so because thinking about early parts of it kind of make me Cringe, and since the Nothing's Fair rewrite went so well....

Except, I knew I couldn't really rewrite it because of it's size, I mean, 400k words? That's wayyyy too much.

Then it occurred to me: why do I have to rewrite it? Why not just edit the parts that really bug me?

So, that's what I'm doing!! I'm going through Dead Inside and editing the parts that really bug me, along with fixing up continuity things. (And fixing scene breaks so they're uniform and easy to read, along with deleting unimportant or embarrassing author's notes, so, like, most of them?? lmao)


These are the things I'm tackling as I edit:

- Kairi related things, making it so that she doesn't just go completely unmentioned by her friends for like 70 chapters. I'm editing the sequence specifically where Namine comes to CO so Namine can be worried about Kairi being left behind, as well touching on why she never goes back to the Islands before chapter 104. On Kairi's end, I'm editing things so she's not just passive "I don't care, it's better this way, Namine wants this" about Namine being gone, but is actually extremely angry all her friends left her because, I'm sorry, that seems more like Kairi to me.

Sure, she was scared of chasing after Sora. But that doesn't mean she wouldn't be angry when Namine leaves and doesn't come back to tell her if she's ok or, well, anything, honestly. It Sucks.

This Kairi thing is my first priority, and then as soon as I've finished editing all chapters relevant to that (and uploaded them), I'll go back through chronologically and edit chapter by chapter, checking over continuity things and cleaning up stuff.

- Aerith/Leon dynamic things, to build off the fact they're Literally Siblings. I've been wanting to do this for a while, as you know, but finding the drive to hunt down specific HB chapters featuring them to tweak is hard. Now it'll just get done while I'm working on everything else. HECK YEAH.

- Romantic SoKai hints?? BYE - I'm deleting these because romantic SoKai will never happen in FtPverse, and I don't need to lead readers along. Also Sora and Kairi don't, uh, think that way about each other anyway so. I need to fix this. ((I'll have to edit The Truth Hurts and Falling to Pieces for this in particular, too, but Dead Inside is top priority.))

- Other things that bug me?? There's a lot of Little Things. Like how Namine casually smacks Riku so often and he like Doesn't Care, somehow. How the 29/Joseph dynamic looks because there are some parts that make me [scowly face]. Delete all instances of "Master Riku". Edit anything that just feels gross when I read through again. Tone down the ShadKai, maybe. Just a little.


There's, there's a lot of little things. I can't think of any Big Things that piss me off outside of the Kairi things. I mean, there's early Dead Inside Namiku as a whole (it's really heavy and I feel untrue to their characters) but that's like the one thing I can't really edit. I can make it less obnoxious, but, that's about it. Doing anything else might throw off, I dunno, the rest of the series?? That'd be bad.


SO, YEAH!

THAT'S THE PLAN!!!

If you want to hear me yell about all these things as I work on them and in general get mad at 14 y/o me, then you can check out the "di bloggin" tag on my personal tumblr!

Want updates exactly when they're posted, along with changelogs for what I tweaked? Then go to the "di bloggin" tag on the ftpverse tumblr!

Also, I'll probably post updates and changelogs to this blog, but, later. Every five chapters, when I get to editing them by chapter again. The first one I'll post will probably be about the changes that were made in the big Kairi edits, since that's what I'm tackling first! ((But, maybe I'll do a post for the first four chapters, since I have posted those edits already..... hmm))


Anyway, Please look forward to these edits!! They may make me want to scream and tear out my hair, but I'm making Dead Inside a thousand times less embarrassing to look back on, so, HECK YEAH. It'll be good. Once I, uh, finish. Eventually. Lmao.