Saturday, January 18, 2014

Chapter Commentary for ch195 yay

Unoriginal title is really super boring but y'know what it's easier on my brain in the long run so
(Chances of Book 4.5 and book 5 having no chapter titles are really really really high tbh)

I'm not sure if I mentioned my broken Wii here, but for like the past six months our Wii has done absolutely everything but play Wii games. We could load channels (like netflix and virtual console titles) and play gamecube games just fine, but no Wii games. :(

But the good news is I found a cheap replacement Wii (system only no chords or controllers or anything, not that it matter) for $35 on ebay. It came in the mail this morning and it works just fine--minus the fact that I can't transfer virtual console titles from my old Wii to the new one, but that's not the Wii's fault, that was Nintendo's decision.

Also fun fact if you change your Wii's language to Spanish you can play Zelda: Twilight Princess 100% in Spanish and I think that's really cool

Anyway

Zelda mix is entirely coincidental and random, but, y'know, it's not a bad mix!




(handy link) (tracklist) (art - which is based on the new Hyrule Warriors spinoff they're making for the WiiU)


chAPTER TIME YAYY

lea aqui

y notas de tumblr muy bien


have random plotting that was in my AN doc oh well I love the creative process I can share

Now how do I start this chapter??
Idk theoretically by this point they should’ve been here a day tho THERE IS THE TIME DIFFERENCE AND JUNK TO CONSIDER AND I. ASSUMED. THAT HB WOULD BE LIKE MID-AFTERNOON but maybe they were mid-morning?
??
Idk
It’s not like time passes properly in CO so what could’ve been “a morning” to Riku could’ve easily been “overnight” to those in HB
Potentially
I mean time hardly passes in CO if I wanted to say that they’ve maybe had dinner by this point but no more than that then I can without a problem
(it’s not like Joseph’s there for more than an hour anyway)

(do not ask me how this transitioned it didn't)

LIKE HE SHOWS UP AND RIKU AND NAMINE ARE. NOT. THERE. (maybe they’re out with Heartless?? ?? would Aerith have taken them out or taken Namine out to practice in a Real Life situation and Riku tags along because of course he does)
Yeah but yeah he shows up while they’re gone and they come and they’re like “how long have you been here?” and he’s like “a while” (Cid “he got here like right after you left”) and
And then of course one of the first-ish things Riku asks is “does 29 know you’re here?” because he doesn’t want to be strangled and
Ye

OH LOOK. I’M WRITING LIKE ROBIN MCKINLEY I’m using phrases like the main character of Dragon Haven did whooooops I should not that was first person I’m in third person I should really not
(I was??? ??? was that the portion of the chapter where Riku was calming himself down about Namine? I think it was)

Oh yeah doesn’t Riku hate failure. hmmmmm
(he’s probably too embarrassed to try again because he doesn’t’ want to fail again because in his head failure is a Big No No and at best it’s going to be a huge embarrassment even tho both Aerith and Namine’d be very understanding)

OH HAHA THAT WAS DUMB AERITH ISN’T IN THE HOUSE SO NVM ON THAT ONE
(she was going to be making cookies because she just keeps doing that whenever Joseph’s over but she wasn’t in the house so Toby can’t be in the kitchen with her ha)

Actually Toby’s really used to sitting around and doing nothing for long periods of time *sobbing*

HANG ON I LOVE MY PLOTTING NTOES FOR THIS BIT
“Does 29 know you’re here?” Riku asks
Joseph immediately goes silent
Everyone else falls silent
Riku exchanges a glance with Namine, because they both expected that
“I’ll go get him,” Riku says, getting up
“But- but you don’t have to do that!!” Joseph says, quickly “I mean he’ll find me eventually and- and I wouldn’t… want to…”
But everyone’s giving him a look because they are all responsible adults here and they know better
“I’d rather not worry him too much,” Riku says. “You know how he gets.”
And Riku’s gone before Joseph can protest
So Joseph sulks

OH WOW I’M SO. JOSEPH FEELS

I’m fairly certain the bit where 29 said Joseph could learn to fight if he got a weapon was actually not exactly canon but *shrugging*


YOU DON’T UNDERSTAND ALL THESE FEELS I LOVE WHEN JOSEPH AND 29 DO THINGS TOGETHER THIS IS SO. WOW. SO. WOW

EXCEPT ACTUALLY THEY DIDN'T MAKE IT INTO THE CHAPTER BECAUSE RIKU'S POV S O UHM LEMME FIND THE BRAINSTORM ONE SEC

Here it is
Note: okay I'm pretty sure I've posted stuff in this formatting before but just in case regular text is dialogue and then everything in parentheses are notes/actions/etc.

No I’m telling you it can work! (Joseph argues, poking the papers with his weapon design on it very furiously as if poking it alone will convince Cid)
An’ I’m tellin’ ya it won’t! (Cid replies) It’s too many extra parts an’ it’ll jus’—
29! (Joseph says, looking up, and he’s somewhere between excited and embarrassed and worried he’s in trouble idek)
(but yeah 29 and Riku just came out ofa  dark corridor or they had been there and 29 was watching and?? Joseph finally noticed)
Oh (and Joseph’s face falls and sulking and) I’m sorry I didn’t tell you where I was going (he mutters) I just figured I could get back before… y’know… you got worried about me and… (he kinda just shrugs) I don’t know…
Well, next time, be sure to let me know where you’re heading, alright? (29 says) I don’t mind if you come here, I just want to make sure I haven’t lost you (there may or may not be a slight crack in his voice at the end there idk) Make sure you tell me next time, got it?
Got it
(29 smiles, pulls up a chair next to Joseph) so what are you working on, anyway?
Oh! (Joseph lights up immediately) y’know how you said if I got myself a weapon, I could learn how to fight? (he doesn’t give 29 time to answer) Well, Cid’s helping me work on a weapon design!
He’s not takin’ any of my advice, though (Cid protests, speaking over Joseph again)
He’s not? (29 asks, either surprised or feigning it) Joseph (partial scolding here) Why aren’t you taking Cid’s advice?
(Joseph pouts a little) He says it’s not gonna work…
Why is that? And, more importantly, what won’t work? (this is 29 I will clarify just so we don't get confused)
He wants a boomerang-dagger hybrid (Cid explains)
Technically, I wanted it to be able to transform into a shield, too (Joseph adds) but Cid said  I could only make it do two things and we both agreed that a boomerang-shield hybrid is much much harder to make work
And how does the boomerang-dagger hybrid work? (29 again)
Look (Joseph points at his drawings) the boomerang should fold in half to form a dagger
Except I can’t think of anythin’ that’ll make it work like he wants it too (Cid explains)
Really? (now 29 is def surprised) Surely there’s some sort of… gear mechanism or something that would allow the boomerang to fold
It’s not getting’ it teh fold tha’s the problem (Cid says) It’s makin’ sure it doesn’t fold on acciden’. Yeh wouldn’t wan’it foldin’ up mid-flight, would’yeh?
That’s why you need a latch or something! (Joseph explains)
Yeh can’t mess with a latch in the middle of battle, though! (Cid protests)

AND I WAS HAVING FEELS BECAUSE 29 AND JOSEPH WERE DOING STUFF TOGETHER AND IDK FEELS. I just couldn't keep it because it was less important to the plot than the thing with Namine and Riku
not to mention I was in Riku's POV
And according to my notes it apparently felt really jarring to swap to them from Riku's POV or something along those lines. (I only said it felt jarring I didn't say why.)

I'll most likely turn this into a full scene and stick it into ASAS at some point because it doesn't look too hard to convert I just have to remember to do that. And I'm apparently really bad at remembering. I guess if you care a lot about it you should probably remind me? Just one ask on tumblr or comment on this blog should be enough tbh. 

anyway


This entire sequence is self-indulgent tbh. It wasn’t just ch193

WHOA WHOA WAIT AFTER THIS CHAPTER I THINK I CAN GO ONTO THE NEXT SEQUENCE?? WHICH WAS?? IS THAT DISNEY CASTLE? ??? ???????????
(That's actually 100% correct but there's like four chapters of transition plus ch200 before Disney Castle actually starts ha)


Gosh darnit I lost Toby
He was with Namine but he can’t be with Namine for this scene to work so?? ??? Maybe he’s helping out Aerith in the kitchen. That’ll work.
(it’s definitely dinner time or past it so)

The thing I mean to get across here is that there is rarely privacy in a house. You can shut your door but that’ll only muffle so much sound. And with how downstairs is laid out? All open space and no doors and hardly any walls? You have no privacy. Any conversation in one room can still be heard in the next room. 


And then I apparenty don't have any prewritten notes about Namine's little thing but maybe that's because this bit excites me a ton but it is a Super Huge Plotpoint that I can't discuss in detail because spoilers
Harumph

BUT I WILL LET YOU KNOW THAT THE BIT WITH NAMINE EXCITES ME A WHOLE LOT BECAUSE I LOVE THIS PLOT POINT IN GENERAL I LOVE IT A LOT AND I AM VERY EXCITED
AND THE FACT THAT NAMINE DENIES SHE DREW IT AND THE POSSIBILITIES OF ANYTHING BAD HAPPENING IN THE FUTURE MAKE ME UPSET
BUT WOW
I LOVE
THIS
SEQUENCE

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